BATTLE OF THE BIRDS
by John Francis Campbell
8-Page Comic Script
Revised 1/30/2014
CHARACTER NOTES
KING: The
king should look not too bright and like kind of a jerk. He is both of those
things.
RAVEN: The
raven is in a human form, despite being a Raven. Should be wearing black, and
look like the most mysterious of the bunch.
GIANT: The
Giant is a large and kind of gross looking dude.
PRINCE: The
prince takes after his father in terms of intelligence. He is, however, much
less of a jerk. He should look like a pretty likeable guy.
GIANT’S DAUGHTER: The youngest of the Giant’s daughters,
and the prettiest to the prince. She doesn’t have to be a looker, though. It is
probably funnier if she is very ugly. Her two older sisters should be
identical, allowing her to stand out a bit as a more important character.
ART NOTES
Keep the art fun and simple!
This retelling is nothing serious, let it stay in the cartoon world.
PAGE ONE – FOUR PANELS
PANEL ONE
The Raven, reveals a wrapped
box to the King. He is a bit surprised. They are in the Raven’s castle.
1. RAVEN: Thank
you for saving me.
PANEL TWO
The King has accepted the box, looking it up and down.
1. RAVEN: But
please, do not open this until you are where you most
want to be.
PANEL THREE
The King looks confused, but he is still holding onto his
gift, clearly already holding it to value.
PANEL FOUR
He leaves the Raven’s room, making his way out.
PAGE TWO – FOUR PANELS
PANEL
ONE
The
King can be seen clearly not having made much distance away from the Raven’s
castle, but he cannot move his focus off of the box.
PANEL TWO
The King begins to unwrap the box.
1.
KING: Thought:
If I just peek..
PANEL THREE
This is the biggest panel on the page, and as the box is
opened, a whole castle begins to pour out in the most magical of ways.
PANEL FOUR
The King is a bit distraught, looking at his sudden
castle. He understands now what the Raven meant.
1.
KING: Ah.
PAGE THREE – SIX PANELS
PANEL
ONE
The
Giant approaches the King. He is significantly larger, being a Giant.
1. GIANT: Having
trouble there, friend?
PANEL TWO
The King gestures in frustration towards his new castle.
PANEL THREE
The Giant inspects the Castle’s size.
1.
GIANT: I
could move this for you, if that’s what you want. But..
PANEL FOUR
The Giant looks a bit more serious.
1. GIANT: You’ll
have to give me your first son, the day he turns
seven.
PANEL FIVE
The King thinks on it.
PANEL SIX
He immediately agrees, shaking the Giants hand. Or just
his finger at least.
1. KING: Deal.
PAGE FOUR – EIGHT PANELS
PANEL
ONE
We
see the Giant hoisting the King’s castle with ease. The King points in the
distance to a beautiful landscape, indicating that’s where the castle should
go.
PANEL
TWO
The
Giant drops the Castle in place.
PANEL
THREE
He
dusts off his hands as the King gives him a thumbs up.
PANEL
FOUR
The
King enters his new home as the Giant takes his leave
PANEL
FIVE
The
moment the King enters, he is greeted by a beautiful woman.
PANEL
SIX
He
is now proudly holding his new baby boy.
PANEL
SEVEN
The
royal family is sitting around at a table with their boy, with banners all
around that say “HAPPY 7TH BIRTHDAY.” There is also a knocking at
the door.
PANEL
EIGHT
The
Queen looks at her husband with great suspicion as the King sweats nervously.
PAGE
FIVE – FIVE PANELS
PANEL
ONE
The
Giant is back in his kingdom with the young Prince. He has set him up in a
giant’s room with giant’s accommodations, and seems pretty proud of himself.
PANEL
TWO
It
is now nighttime, and the Prince looks out his window.
PANEL
THREE
He
sees a young giant girl who is very beautiful to him.
PANEL
FOUR
He
looks at her happily, falling in love. He has probably not yet considered the
difficulties in maintaining a relationship with someone many times larger than
him.
PANEL
FIVE
He
rolls into his giant’s bed, and happily drifts off to sleep, thinking of his
newfound crush.
PAGE
SIX – FIVE PANELS
PANEL
ONE:
The
Giant bursts into the Prince’s room excitedly.
1.GIANT: Who
wants to marry one of my daughters?!
PANEL
TWO:
The
Giant has three daughters, each a pretty as you may imagine to be, but the
youngest one is the girl that the Prince had watched one page before. He speaks
as he cuts off the Giant’s sentence, pointing at her.
1.GIANT: Take
your pick-
2.PRINCE: Her.
PANEL
THREE:
The
Giant is still grinning.
PANEL
FOUR:
The
Giant’s smile suddenly disappears. He looks incredibly angry, but still
composed. The Prince’s speech bubble should interrupt the Giant’s once more.
1. GIANT: Her?
2.
PRINCE: Yes
PANEL
FIVE:
The
Giant is now even angrier. The Giant’s daughter of note appears very happy in
the background, while the other two daughters don’t seem to care at all.
1. GIANT: There
will now be tests to prove your worth! Complete
each of these by
the time I return home today!
PAGE
SEVEN – THREE PANELS
PANEL
ONE:
The
Prince is working hard cleaning a room many times larger than him. The Giant’s
daughter is diligently helping him out, clearly getting much more work done
than he is.
1.
GIANT(OP): Clean
the house!
PANEL
TWO:
The
Prince is focusing intently on weaving two feathers together, while the
daughter has a large mat already woven of beautiful feathers.
1.GIANT(OP): Re-thatch
my roof!
PANEL
THREE:
The
Giant’s daughter is lifting the Prince to the top of a very tall tree, as he
reaches towards a bird’s nest.
1.GIANT(OP): Go
get that.. bird’s nest! The one in the tallest tree over
there!
PAGE
EIGHT – EIGHT PANELS
PANEL
ONE:
The
Giant aggressively enters his home again.
1.GIANT:
Did you do all the things?
PANEL
TWO:
The
Giant looks at the Prince, very suspicious of him.
1.GIANT: Did
you do them by yourself?
PANEL
THREE:
The
prince’s face makes it very clear he is lying to the Giant, in a very nervous
manner, but knows he will be in trouble if he’s caught.
1.PRINCE: Yes?
PANEL
FOUR:
The
Giant thinks with continued suspicion, looking around the room.
1.GIANT: Hmmm…
2:PRINCE:
Can
I marry your daughter now?
PANEL
FIVE:
The
Giant is yelling with his mouth wide, getting spit in the Prince’s face.
1.GIANT: ABSOLUTELY
NOT
PANEL
SIX:
The
Giant pulls out a giant size bucket, filled with water.
PANEL
SEVEN:
He
lifts the Prince up
PANEL
EIGHT:
And
drowns him in the bucket. The Giant’s daughter starts crying in the background.
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