Thursday, January 23, 2014

Week Two

Written Script for the short story The Night-Born by Jack London

(under the cut to prevent stretched posts)





THE NIGHT-BORN
by Jack London
12-Page Comic Script
Last Revised 1/23/2014


CHARACTER NOTES

TREFETHAN:The older of the men.

MILNER:            The younger. Looks a bit skeptical of these stories.

LUCY:            The woman Trefethan meets. She is described as tall and Amazonian.

ART NOTES
Most of the art should be done in heavy inks, with a watercolor wash.




PAGE ONE – ONE PANEL

PANEL ONE
Start with a scene of San Francisco to establish the setting: windows are open, streets are crowded, etc.

PAGE TWO – SIX PANELS

PANEL ONE
Now we establish Trefethan and Milner, the characters speaking.

1. TREFETHAN:             It was in 1898--I was thirty-five then, Yes, I know you are adding it up. You're right. I'm forty-seven now; look ten years more; and the doctors say--damn the doctors anyway!

PANEL TWO
Milner nods and holds up his drink.

1. MILNER:             You certainly were, old man.

PANEL THREE
Milner leans back in his chair.

1. MILNER:             I'll never forget when you cleaned out those lumberjacks in the M. & M. that night that little newspaper man started the row. Slavin was in the country at the time, and his manager wanted to get up a match with Trefethan.

PANEL FOUR
Trefethan slams his drink down.

1. TREFETHAN:             Well look at me now!

PANEL FIVE
Trefethan stands up in his seat dramatically.

1. TREFETHAN:             That's what the Goldstead did to me--God knows how many millions, but nothing left in my soul..... nor in my veins. The good red blood is gone. I am a jellyfish, a huge, gross mass of oscillating protoplasm, a--a . .

PANEL SIX
Trefethan calms and looks into his glass.



PAGE THREE – TWO PANELS

PANEL ONE
Trefethan has sat back down, still gazing into his drink.

1. TREFETHAN:             Women looked at me then; and turned their heads to look a second time. Strange that I never married. But the girl. That's what I started to tell you about. I met her a thousand miles from anywhere, and then some. And she quoted to me those very words of Thoreau that Bardwell quoted a moment ago--the ones about the day-born gods and the night-born.
PANEL TWO
A scene of the Rockies

1. TREFETHAN-OP:             It was after I had made my locations on Goldstead that I made that trip east over the Rockies, angling across to the Great Up North there the Rockies are something more than a back-bone. They are a boundary, a dividing line, a wall unscalable. There is no intercourse across them, though, on occasion, from the early days, wandering trappers have crossed them, though more were lost by the way than ever came through. And that was why I tackled the job. It was a traverse any man would be proud to make. I am prouder of it right now than anything else I have ever done.
                                                It is an unknown land. Great stretches of it have never been explored. There are big valleys there where the white man has never set foot, and Indian tribes as primitive as ten thousand years ... almost, for they have had some contact with the whites. Parties of them come out once in a while to trade, and that is all. Even the Hudson Bay Company failed to find them and farm them.


PAGE FOUR – FOUR PANELS

PANEL ONE
We see the girl for the first time. She stands with dogs behind her, in a canyon.

1. TREFETHAN-OP:             And now the girl…

PANEL TWO
Trefethan is working his way into the camp of Native Americans. He is smoking.

PANEL THREE
Trefethan’s eyes lift in surprise. 

PANEL FOUR
Trefethan is shown signing with Lucy.

1. TREFETHAN-OP:             Lucy. That was her name. Sign language--that was all we could talk with, till they led me to a big fly--you know, half a tent, open on the one side where a campfire burned.
PANEL FOUR
Trefethan and Lucy are in his tent, sitting across from one-another.

1. TREFETHAN-OP:             Her eyes--blue, not China blue, but deep blue, like the sea and sky all melted into one, and very wise. More than that, they had laughter in them--warm laughter, sun-warm and human, very human, and . . . shall I say feminine? They were. They were a woman's eyes, a proper woman's eyes. You know what that means. Can I say more?

PAGE FIVE – FIVE PANELS

PANEL ONE
We are back in the room with Trefethan and Milner. Trefethan is enthusiastically and a bit frantically waving his drink.

1. TREFETHAN:             You fellows think I am screwed. I'm not. This is only my fifth since dinner. I am dead sober.

PANEL TWO
Cut back to the valleys of the Rockies. Trefethan and Lucy are still in Trefethan’s tent. Lucy puts out her hand towards Trefethan.


PANEL TWO
A close up on Lucy.

1. Lucy:             Stranger. I'm real glad to see you.


PANEL THREE
Lucy commands the people.

1. TREFETHAN-OP:             She dismissed them. And, by Jove, they went. They took her orders and followed her blind. She told them to make a camp for me and to take care of my dogs. And they did, too. She was a regular She-Who-Must-Be-Obeyed, and it chilled me to the marrow.
PANEL FOUR
We see Trefethan’s dogs have been re-equipped. He has much more strewn across his tent.

1. TREFETHAN-OP:             I stayed there a week. It was on her invitation. She promised to fit me out.

PANEL FIVE
Trefethan and Lucy standing and conversing intently.

1. TREFETHAN-OP:             We talked and talked, while the first snow fell and continued to fall. And this was her story.


PAGE SIX – FOUR PANELS

PANEL ONE
A younger Lucy is shown working hard in the frontier fields.

1. TREFETHAN-OP:             She was frontier-born, of poor settlers.

PANEL TWO
Younger Lucy is running across a wide field.

1. TREFETHAN-OP:             She said some nights she wanted to run like a wild thing, through the moonshine and under the stars, and to run and run and keep on running.

PANEL THREE
Younger Lucy is standing with her father. He is handing her a couple pills as she worriedly talks to him.

1. TREFETHAN-OP:             She told her father one day and he said to just go to bed.

PANEL FOUR
Younger Lucy lies in bed, eyes still very much open.

1. TREFETHAN-OP:             But she still had her dreams.







PAGE SEVEN – FOUR PANELS

PANEL ONE
Younger Lucy sticks her head out of the kitchen window with a dreamy look in her eyes.

PANEL TWO
Somewhat merging with the previous panel, making it clean this is a day dream, we see young Lucy running down a country road, populated by lambs and flowers.

PANEL THREE
Younger Lucy’s husband is shown pulling her back out from the window, looking angry and yelling at her.

PANEL FOUR
Younger Lucy is seen packing her bags and her husband is angrily storming in.


PAGE EIGHT – THREE PANELS

PANEL ONE
Her husband raises his hands towards Lucy.

PANEL TWO
Lucy raises a Colt .44 at him

PANEL THREE
She walks out of the house, to her husband’s dismay.


PAGE NINE – SEVEN PANELS

PANEL ONE
Lucy exchanges money with a Canoe-rider. The canoe is about 60 feet long. Many other people are behind and around her to board the canoe as well.

PANEL TWO
Lucy is very happy to be on the canoe. She feels free in the silence of nature.

PANEL THREE
Lucy has reached the island camp. This is a large panel, and shows young boys spearing for fish, and young men hunting deer. There is tall grass, and beach. It looks much like a paradise.


PANEL FOUR
She goes to sleep in her tent, very content.

PANEL FIVE
She and others are readying to leave again on the Canoe. They are embarking towards the ocean.

PANEL SIX
The canoe is in scraps, dead bodies surround Lucy. She is grasping onto a dog’s tail caught on the shore.

PANEL SEVEN
She gets up, weakened but determined.


PAGE TEN – FIVE PANELS

PANEL ONE
She stumbles towards an old cabin, part-rotted.

PANEL TWO
We see Lucy inside the cabin, rummaging around.

PANEL THREE
She has opened a moosehide sack in the corner, shocked at its contents.

PANEL FOUR
All the moosehide sacks are filled up with gold.

1. LUCY-OP:             Gold.

PANEL FIVE
All the moosehide sacks are filled up with gold.

1. TREFETHAN-OP:             She cached the gold, saving out thirty pounds, which she carried back to the coast. Then she signaled a passing canoe, made her way to Pat Healy’s trading post as Dyea, outfitted, and went over Chilcoot Pass.

PAGE ELEVEN – TWO PANELS

PANEL ONE
Back to Trefethan and Lucy sitting together.

1. TREFETHAN:             Are you happy… satisfied? With a quarter of a million you wouldn’t have to work down in the States.”

2. LUCY:            I wouldn’t swap places with any woman down in the States.

PANEL TWO
Back to Trefethan and Lucy sitting together.

1. LUCY:             These are my people; this is where I belong.


PAGE TWELVE – TWO PANELS

PANEL ONE
We return to the room in present-time once more, where Trefethan is rounding up his story to his friends.

1. TREFETHAN:             By God! I wish I weren’t a coward! I could go back to her. She’s there, now. I could shape up and live many a long year… with her… up there.

PANEL TWO
He falls more into his sadness.

1. TREFETHAN:             But I am an old man- look at me. I am soft and tender. The thought of the long day’s travel with the dogs appalls me; the thought of the keen frost in the morning and of the frozen sled-lashings frightens me-
PANEL THREE
He looks down into his drink one last time.

PANEL FOUR
We see him and his friends all at the table, the full room showcased to pull us out of the scene.

1. TREFETHAN:             Well, here’s to the Night-Born. She WAS a wonder.”



















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